This is our first draft of our treatment. We are pondering and still deciding on details; such as names of the characters. We have plenty of ideas but this is the main bulk of our story:
10/9/14 | PLANNING | TREATMENT
MAIN GIRL, approximately 12 years old, unnaturally pale with an unhinged look in her eyes, dark circles, tired, sits stiff and upright on a bed in a psychiatric ward in hospital. She is looking straight ahead while a voice-over of discussion between her PARENTS and the DOCTOR about the girl's mental health history and her future in the ward. The doctor recommends she is not released but her parents insist.
Then a cross cut to a large, wooden desk lit dimly lit with desk lamp scattered with early release forms, health records telling her history and there is the sound of a heart thumping, slowly increasing in rate and volume. The forms are revealing that main girl suffers from multiple personality disorder. The early release forms have main girl’s names and details all over them. Desk lamp is turn off really suddenly and the screen goes pitch black and the heart beat sound is extremely fast and loud, then the screen goes bright artificial white and the title comes up in black text.
Mid shot in main girl’s bedroom with her acting innocent, being put to bed, reading in bed and parents leaving her room, light being turned off and saying goodnight. As soon as they have left main girl sneaks out of bed, stuffs a pillow under the duvet to mimic a person sleeping, pockets a weapon and climbs out of her window.
Cross cut to a YOUNG GIRL, approximately 9 years old, big brown, innocent eyes, hair up, being bullied by two OLDER GIRLS, approximately 15. Main girl sees this as she is wandering the streets in her nightwear and has a flashback to a time in her recent childhood when she was bullied herself. This triggers her anger and then forces an attack,Young girl sees Eleanor over the other girls' shoulders, gets frightened and runs away to hide behind a car. Eleanor starts following and stalking the two girls before killing them. We hear the struggle and see the young girl's panicked face as the two other girls are being murdered. We see one of the girls reached to their neck to try and stop the main girl from strangling her but fails. A shot of the dead girls and you see their necks with red scars from the wire.
Cross cut to main girl climbing back through her window, going to an en suite bathroom and washing off the any blood and dirt, staring at herself in the bathroom mirror and creepily smiles. Sudden stop to black.
